150 Word Note for Peer Review #2:

I love the overall argument of your essay. You took a unique standpoint and supported your claims well. Not many people would have chosen to argue in favor of Strawson and the amount of effort you put into defending his points and presenting your own is adamant and noticeable. Your introduction draws readers in and the only thing I suggest to revise is how your thesis integrates into your intro. The intro and thesis are really strong by themselves but connecting them more would make it even stronger. 

            Your use of “they say” is also incredibly well done and oriented. The way you analyzed Beck’s essay and found ways to make her words and evidence support your argument makes it clear that you really understood the texts and how to apply them in your essay. You did a really good job of being the “driver” in this essay. 

            Overall I think you did a really good job and there’s not many corrections or criticisms I can make about your essay.