A skill that I am working on during my second paper is topic/transition sentences. I never learned how to fully incorporate them into my previous essays, and it is a thing I have struggled with for quite a bit. I also want to work on restating my argument throughout my paper. This was a comment I got on both my peer review and overall grading. 

Revision goals that I have for this paper is to rework my thesis and my conclusion. To do this, I will revisit my introduction paragraph and my argument points and try to rewrite my thesis, so it flows easier and better articulates my points. For my conclusion, I again want to revisit my argument points and try to connect them in a way that makes sense for a conclusion and also opens up further discussion. 

My biggest challenge is going to be reworking my thesis. I’m not the best at writing them in the first place so having to strengthen it is going to be a challenge, but one that I should be able to accomplish. Should I need assistance, I can always have a friend or roommate read my essay and give me ideas as to how I can improve my thesis.